ALmost a week late, but heck, who's giving the deadlines around here?
Without further ado, presenting my Valentine piece.
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Seraphim Anthology #08 - Unconditional
A poem by Seraphim
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If roses are red, and violets are blue,
Sugar is far more sweeter than you.
If winter dawns, and water turns to ice,
A gaze it draws deeper than your eyes.
If the sun sets, and blood trickle,
Your cheeks would match it very little.
If spring comes, and flowers bloom,
Not yours is the smell that fills the room.
If birds would chirp, and the wind sings,
Never would your voice have such a melodious ring.
And yet, by heaven, I think my love as rare,
For it is not one that is born from compare.
A love not from how you are,
Thus a love that has stretch thus far.
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Heh, I know that if you're a literary fan, you'll be vomiting at the lack of taste in my first attempt at a sonnet. But hey, how many people out there are literature enthusiasts? Or even know what a sonnet is for that matter?
So there you go, my first attempt at a sonnet and my Valentine piece.
2 comments:
not that bad for a first time I must say. The layout's pretty simple though. Too straight forward. For a subject that's very deep and all, 'twould have made it better if you had jumbled it abit. instead of using an (a)(a)(b)(b) approach you could have done something like say an (a)(b)(a)(b) or something like that. Dunno if you understand what i mean by this but heck....that's my two cents worth. Not much. Just two cents. lol.
Nice read anyways. :D
actually, it is very nice.. haha.. very very nice.. though i dunno what a sonnet is.. but still.. the thing does make sense.. haha.. unlike others that have you permutating and anocdate-ing.. haha.. if i spelled tt right.. chao..
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